As a young reporter, I used to whine that my editors â€œdumbed downâ€ my writing when they traded big words for simple ones, broke up long sentences or otherwise made my writing clearer.
Iâ€™ve learned an important lesson since then.
Clarity is never dumb.
Clogged, jargon-filled writing is one of the biggest mistakes I find in professional communications today. The point of all writing is to convey a message. Yet the writing that comes out of businesses, schools and other institutions too often lacks a point, the messages weighed down under awkward phrases.
Take a look at the following sentence: The university seeks an increase in funds for the acquisition of periodicals in the library.
Now look at it this way: The university library needs more money to buy books.
Which one is better?
If you picked the first sentence, Iâ€™m not surprised. You have been trained to think that big words and long sentences sound professional.
In college, professors gave you minimum word and page requirements for your assignments, convincing you that good writing is long writing. That lesson is reinforced on the job, where you face reports and presentations full of acronyms, clauses and paragraphs that never end.
Hear me on this: Long writing does not make you sound smart. Nor does it make you sound professional.
It makes you sound scared.
Jargon and â€œbureaucrateseâ€ force readers to focus on your words, not your message. And when your message is cloudy, you fail as a writer.
Are you guilty of the heavy writing Iâ€™ve just described? No fear. Whether you realize it or not, you already know that simple is better.
Think back to those college days. When studying, did you highlight passages in your text books? You likely do the same thing today when youâ€™re reading annual reports or memos from co-workers. Thatâ€™s your mind telling you that not every single word youâ€™re reading is crucial.
So, why waste time with words and sentences that arenâ€™t necessary? It is better to make sure that every word you write is clear, precise and essential to your message.
Here are some tips to clarify your writing:
Whatâ€™s the message?
Before you start writing, ask yourself a few questions. Who cares about this topic? Why should they care? What is the impact of this issue? What do you want people to do/think/feel after they read your words?
Questions like these will focus your writing on the most important points, which always adds clarity. They will also define your message and help you choose the perfect words.
Write like you talk.
You run into a colleague at the water cooler. She asks whatâ€™s new, and you say, â€œDue to a lack of funding, my plan to acquire an enhanced transportation method will have to be put on hold.â€
Translation: I donâ€™t have enough money for a new car right now.
For some reason, people think that when they put a message in writing, they have to dress it up and bog it down. Theyâ€™re wrong. Writing should sound like you. This is how you establish your voice â€“ your unique view of an issue translated into the written word. Itâ€™s OK to have a voice, even in professional settings.
The key to writing like you talk is to actually talk while writing. Before you put fingers to keyboard, pretend youâ€™re explaining the issue to your mother. Write it that way.
And, yes, the level of formality in your writing should reflect the audience. I would expect you to speak differently to the President of the United States than your mom. But donâ€™t confuse formality with stiffness. You must still be clear, and your writing should still sound like you.
Assume that your audience has little or no idea what youâ€™re talking about; that your memo or report will be the first time theyâ€™ve ever heard of your topic. This is true even if you know that your audience are your colleagues, who are as well-versed and as well-educated as you are on your subject.
When writing, pretend youâ€™re trying to explain this to a group of middle-schoolers. This ensures that you keep it simple, stick to the basics, and avoid the pitfalls of jargon. Define acronyms. Cite studies. Explain procedures and use short words.
I know, I know. The inner Ph.D in you is gasping in pain. How can she possibly show off all those years of college if she canâ€™t use the jargon of her field? Tell her to shut it. Sheâ€™ll be fine once she realizes that her message makes her sound smart; not her words.
Speaking of wordsâ€¦ Shorter is better.
Look again at the two sentences above. We replaced â€œacquisition of periodicalsâ€ with â€œbuy books.â€ We cut ten syllables to two.
You might argue that â€œperiodicalsâ€ does not exactly mean â€œbooks.â€ Youâ€™re right. The point is that you can always find a simpler way to say things. As an added bonus, finding the simple way forces you to be as specific as possible. Thatâ€™s always a good thing.
Get rid of jargon.
Iâ€™ve said a lot about the evils of jargon, which should have been a clue that it would eventually get its own section. Nothing grates my nerves as much as jargon. Amateur communicators think that jargon and overly technical writing makes them sound like an expert. Look how much I know about this! I can spew all these fancy words!
I argue the opposite. Jargon is a camoflauge for a lack of confidence in the message. How do you know if something is jargon? Ask yourself this: Does a reader need a degree in the subject matter to recognize the phrase? Could a reader with no background in this issue understand the word? If the answer is no, find another way to say it. (Again, think about how you would explain it to your mother.)
People especially rely on jargon when delivering bad news, as if the message is easier to take when couched under â€œtech speak.â€ Bad news is bad no matter how you say it. Readers (a broad term for your customers, co-workers, superiors, etc.) will know when youâ€™re trying to pull one over on them, and they wonâ€™t appreciate it. Sales are down? Then just say it.
Take a cue from Winston Churchill. The news from France is bad.
Mark Twain once mused, â€œI didnâ€™t have time to write a short letter, so I wrote a long one.â€
Professional writers know what he means. The hardest part of writing is rewriting, and the hardest part of rewriting is cutting. You spend all that time putting the words down, and then youâ€™re supposed to erase a third of them?
Yep. Writing is cruel.
But if you take it in steps, cutting doesnâ€™t have to be so painful.
Start by looking for redundancies. Do you refer to an â€œadvance planâ€? Just say â€œplan.â€ It means the same thing. How about â€œunexpected surpriseâ€? Arenâ€™t all surprises unexpected? Youâ€™ll be amazed how many of these redundant phrases crop up in your work and weaken your message.
Next, condense or break up sentences. Read your work aloud. If you canâ€™t finish a sentence without taking a breath, itâ€™s too long. Either break it up into two sentences or shorten it. With paragraphs, a good rule of thumb is to not exceed a few sentences.
Finally, change passive to active voice. Not sure of the difference? Letâ€™s look at some sentences again.
Passive: The man was bitten by the dog.
Active: The dog bit the man.
The first sentence is passive; the subject of the sentence (the man) is acted upon. An active sentence is one in which the subject acts upon something else. Turning your passive sentences into active ones will immediately make your writing sharper, warmer and more authoritative.
You can spot passive voice by the word â€œwasâ€ and by the use of â€œingâ€ words. She was dancing becomes She danced.
The proposal was approved by the city council becomes The city council approved the proposal.
Proofread beyond the spellchecker.
Township to hold forum on pubic safety.
If you caught the mistake in that sentence, Iâ€™m impressed. If you didnâ€™t catch it, read it again. See it now? Didnâ€™t know your local government was so concerned with your pelvic health, did you?
Too bad that real-life headline from my first newspaper job was supposed to say â€œpublic safety.â€
Few things can kill your message as quickly as typos. Donâ€™t rely solely on the spellchecker to proofread your work. Print it out. Edit it. Then edit again.